I really like how the characters
from “Too Much Light Makes the Baby Go Blind” said basically nothing, and yet I
was able to understand exactly what was happening. All they did was say how the
phrases were being said like “statement. Statement. Question.” But somehow even
though there wasn’t much plot or explanation, the point of what they were
trying to accomplish came across. I think this is where I plan on going with my
poem. I don’t think I need a lot of plot, explanations, or descriptions. I want
the words that I write to speak for themselves and to have them let the listeners
decide where the story is going and whether they want to take things a certain
way or not. I think especially being about such a sensitive subject matter,
getting too graphic or detailed would take away from the point I want to get
across.
I also
like the deliverance of “No, Of Course I Know You.” It has a very interesting
tone to it that really convinces the listener that what the reader is saying is
incredibly important to him. He keeps repeating certain phrases, as I hope to
continue to do in my own story. I also really want to work to keep a tone that
makes me sound invested so that people listening will also feel invested.
"Too Much Light Makes the Baby Go Blind" was also one of my favorites. Like you said, I think it was extremely powerful and descriptive, yet so cursory. Another thing I realized from this piece was the way the speakers would change the tone of their voice to articulate the phrases they were describing; for example, they spoke with an angry tone when they said "disagreement." It would be cool if you could incorporate some of that into your piece as well. Short and simple: I love where you are going with your piece. It seems like you are developing a great direction for your composition and I cannot wait to see how it turns out.
ReplyDeleteI also really enjoyed "Too Much Light Makes the Baby Go Blind" and how they were able to convey so much emotion and humor through what at firsts seems like utter nonsense. I definitely think you can incorporate a similar and perhaps even stronger level of emotion into your own piece, which you've already done in your first reading. I appreciate the fact that your piece has a certain vagueness to it that allows the listener to fill in the blanks, yet still gives them enough detail to understand the message you're delivering.
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